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April 19, 2010
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A queen left her home one day
To search for a kingdom far away
Her intentions were as black as her heart
But she knew how to play her part

The dark beauty left her aged king
For her whims wanted better things
She left to capture another man
Against all odds she would stand

The dark queen fought with all her might
For what she saw in her sight
Her brave army fighting another
Setting pawns against each other

Then she saw him, tall and pale
And his queen in dress and veil
Seeing her own love be threatened
The white queen drew her weapon

She took down knights and holy men
Cutting through pawns again and again
Castles fell on the battle field
Victims of fate being sealed

The black queen faced her adversary
Both were determined but also weary
Foot to foot they drew their swords
While the kings looked on, ignored

The aged black king had come to see
If his queen would take the victory
The white queen saw her foe
Towards the dark king she'd go

The pale king moved to aide
This disastrous failed raid
And when he moved to help fate
What do you know? Checkmate!
100 Themes - Misfortune

Chess has been on my mind all day long

Submitting to :iconrawem0tion:'s theme Shameless Self Promotion.
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Critique by xxAgonisticMiseryxx Jan 17, 2013, 11:13:34 AM
This poem is amazing.
Even though you submitted it a few years ago, I just found it today.
You did an extraordinary job; the way you told this story in poetic rhyming fashion and made it flow so mellifluously. I've read it at least ten times now and each time I find some new little quirk to enjoy.

'She took down knights and holy men'
I love how you didn't say bishop, but instead stated it as 'holy men.' This poem actually reminds me of some of Walt Whitman's work.

From what I've read and written, some poem endings can be really awkward, but congratulations, the last stanza was one of my favorite parts.
Congratulations on writing such a masterpiece.
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing! Love the flow and the imagery. :D
tanafeyroyale Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your piece got featured in :iconpoem-forthe-poemless:'s journal.
Here is a link for you to see it yourself: [link]
tanafeyroyale Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem, if you ever want to join a prompt again you're always welcome :D
axes4six Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:laughing: Funny ending!

Yep, chess fan right here! :)

tanafeyroyale Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the fav. I'm very much a chess player, so this was a long time in the making. :)
eldestmuse Featured By Owner May 28, 2010
You don't see a lot of rhyming poetry, or poetry with a storyline, these days and I enjoyed this one. Nice work!
tanafeyroyale Featured By Owner May 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
VampirateLycan Featured By Owner May 6, 2010
I love this, it reminds me of my dad teaching me how to play chess.

I pulverised him. lol :D

Love it. :D
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